托福写作185题库独立范文及解析:第167题

2022-06-11 10:03:53

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  Your school has enough money to purchase either computers for students or books for the library. Which should your school choose to buy — computers or books? Use specific reasons and examples to support your recommendation.

  If our school has enough money to pay for necessary improvements to its facilities, we can spend it on new books for the library or on more computers. Our school already has books in its library and it already has computers. Since we have more books than computers, I think that new computers wouldbenefit the students more.

  Computers can access up-to–date information on the Internet. Right now, the reference books in our library are very outdated. Our encyclopedia set is several years old. But if every student had access to a computer, we all could have the latest facts and figures on everything.

  Unfortunately, giving every student a computer means we need a lot of money. Right now, the ratio of computers to students is one to twelve. This means students only get to work on the computers three or four times a week. But if every student had a computer, we could use it whenever we wanted.

  “Information on demand” should be our slogan. Students today need lots of information right away. Life goes by too quickly to wait. It takes forever to identify a book that you think might have the information you need. Then you have to go to the library and look for the book. Usually it’s not even there.

  With a computer, information searches are instantaneous. If we all had computers, we could access more information and access it faster by computer. We could have all the information we needed for our schoolwork. We could all improve our grades. For these reasons, I feel that purchasing more computers will benefit us more than buying more books.

  满分要素剖析

  一、语言表达

  1、Since we have more books than computers, I think that new computers would benefit the students more. 这句话里面结构非常好,since的意思是“因为”,benefit sb more的意思是使人更多的受益。这两个词(组)指的我们应用在作文中。像文中最后一句话For these reasons, I feel that purchasing more computers will benefit us more than buying more books.也应用了benefit more. But if every student had access to a computer, we all could have the latest facts and figures on everything.

  二、逻辑结构

  本文逻辑结构比较特出,整篇文章就是一个大的对比。首先说明了学校电脑和图书的情况。然后用一段对购买电脑进行了利弊分析,进而再对购买图书进行了利弊分析,然后得出结论认为买电脑比买书更加重要一些。这种整篇大对比的方法使得文章非常有新意。

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