托福写作185题库独立范文及解析:第164题

2022-05-19 15:23:43

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  People do many different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health?

  Good health is the goal that everyone wants to pursue. Different people chose different ways to keep healthy. As far as I am concerned, I have my own way of staying healthy.

  We may expect that physical exercise is the key factor for good health, which, in fact is the case. Swimming, basketball, soccer are all my favorite sports. Not only will physical exercises keep the body in shape and make us healthy, but, most important of all, sport give us a sense of teamwork and hones our spirit of perseverance. For example, Ping-Pong, is one of the Chinese traditional strengths in athletic sports. It sharpens the participators nerves. You have to cope with a range of variations in angles and rotations. The only way to be awinner is to outwit your opponent, but not by means of physical strength.

  To eat more nutritious food is another effective way to make us energetic and robust. A balanced diet compromising of meat, cereal, milk, fish, eggs, vegetables and fruit provides us with the necessary nutrition on which we absolutely rely. That’s the immediate reason why I strongly oppose the behavior of partial preference on food adoption?

  In addition, stayingoptimistic and active mentally is also veryhelpful to one’s health. A good mood makes everything pleasantforyou. A generous character makes you popular among your friends. Presumably, such a person can live healthily. On the contrary, pessimisticpeopleonly find the road unfoldingin front of them becoming narrower. Disease will definitely accompany with them.

  The way to keep us healthy varies among people, yet, physical exercise, balanced diet and a healthy mentality are inevitablewaysfor both adults and children to stayhealth.

  满分要素剖析

  一、语言表达

  1、On the contrary, pessimisticpeople only find the road unfolding in front of them becoming narrower. 本句的on the contrary承接了上文,引出了一个相反的对比。这里的pessimistic是指悲观的。

  2、The only way to be a winner is to outwit your opponent, but not by means of physical strength. 本句话里面有亮点词,outwit的意思是“以智取胜”,这样的词虽然看似比较简单,但是用起来可以凸显我们的语言功底。

  3、Not only will physical exercises keep the body in shape and make us healthy, but, most important of all, sport gives us a sense of teamwork and hones our spirit of perseverance. 本句句式复杂,并且又多个插入,这种句子我们应当学会写,在文章中适当插入长难句有利于我们得到高分。

  二、逻辑结构:

  本文是一个正正正的支持结构,用了大量的对比,各种情况对比等等。这些论证方法都极大程度上的使文章结构清晰,说理充分,并且最终取得高分。在我们的作文中,建议大家多使用这样的论证方法,更好的凸显全文主旨。

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